"The Government's investment in arts, music, and theatre is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead" to what extend do you agree with this statement

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"The Government's investment in arts, music, and theatre is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead" to what extend do you agree with this statement

The Goverments should invest in more productive sectors like in public services to save the grants than invest their funds in arts, musics, and theatres. I totally agree that investment in public services is extremely essential than other sectors and it can save the budgets.

First, there is no doubt that investment in public services can influence the increase of numerous sectors such as economical growth, accessibility in each area, and social economic. This investment means that the Governments has attempted to do their responsibility for prospering the citizens, for example, by building many educational institutions and medical facilities which are fulfilled with complete facilities and certified human resources. These ways are believed to be triggers to increase the citizens' prosperity that will affect to countries' competitiveness significantly. Some people tought that education and medical accessibilities are basic needs for human life. As a result, investment in public services such as building a large number of public schools and hospitals facilities will escalate the citizens prosperity.

Furthermore, arts, musics, and theatres facilities are not main necessities of people, in order that investment in these fields will waste the funds because its benefits are not directly felt by the society and that investment will also be load of financial, mainly in developing and underdeveloped countries. In other word, investment in those sectors are not highly required in that countries before the primary necessities are fulfilled. The countries' revenue is accumulated from the public by taxation system, in order to, Governments should utilize the available funds in productive sectors effectively. The funds can be utilized to others, if the urgent sectors are done successfully and efficiently. Therefore, investment in arts, musics, and theatres should not be done first to save the grants, especially in developing and underdeveloped countries.

In conclusion, investment in public services will be more effective and efficient to increase a large number of other sectors and it does not waste the funds which are collected by taxation system from the citizens, moreover, investment in arts, musics, and theatres are not primary priority, especially in developing and underdeveloped countries. The Governments should allocate the available funds effectively and efficiently to increase the citizens' prosperity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...he increase of numerous sectors such as economical growth, accessibility in each area, and...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...believed to be triggers to increase the citizens prosperity that will affect to countrie...
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Line 3, column 693, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...basic needs for human life. As a result, investment in public services such as bu...
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Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ent in public services such as building a large number of public schools and hospitals facilities...
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Line 3, column 818, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
... hospitals facilities will escalate the citizens prosperity. Furthermore, arts, musi...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
... primary necessities are fulfilled. The countries revenue is accumulated from the public ...
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...successfully and efficiently. Therefore, investment in arts, musics, and theatres...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ore effective and efficient to increase a large number of other sectors and it does not waste the...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...ctively and efficiently to increase the citizens prosperity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72802197802 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14186158634 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450549450549 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.6195161614 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.928571429 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269036943464 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100100171675 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548057781914 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181620644286 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231460175035 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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