As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
I disagree with the given statement which states that the technology deteriorate the ability of humans to think. Technology makes our lives much easier and better.No longer we need to eat raw food, or drink unfiltered water or die from incurable diseases. If we want to commute to our work place, instead of walking, we can use a car or public transport to reach our destination quickly, we use computers to perform complex and repetitive calculations.This leaves us with enough time to pursue our creative endeavour by searching for innovative solutions to new problems like how to cure diseases like cancer, how gravitational waves gives information about the universe , the origin of Incas and Mayans etc.Technologies have not only made our lives easier, but also helped us to solve many problems whih would have been impossible to solve. As an example, the recent discovery of gravitational waves changed how we view the universe.It was done by extremely sensitive Michelson's interfereometer which should detect a change in arm lenght 1000 times smaller than a proton. Without super computers and other complex sensors, this feat couldn't have been achieved.Having this futuristic technology enabled scientists to detect gravitational waves.This is one of the many many examples,where technology aided people to learn about the mysteries of nature.
Having said that, we must not become too reliant on technology. If we begin to use calculators even for simple multiplications, we will soon lose the ability to perform simple calculations,using spell checks for simple, everyday words may result in us forgetting the spelling altogether. Also, GPS,originally designed as a military technology, when it was commercialized, became such an indespensible part of our phones that the many millenials donot know how to use a map. These so called "small" things have a cumulative effect and in the long run can affect how a person thinks.For example,in may of the Universities, students in the class are observed to be typing notes in their ipads instead of writing them down.Research had proven that that the students who write down the notes where more like to retain the important points of the class. It is because, when we write, we tend to do it slower ,which will make one understand a point and then write in his/her own words, whereas while typing,which is typically faster, a student tends to write mechanically without understanding, what is being said. These are some of several examples,in which technology can hamper the growth of human intelligence
In the above 2 aragraphs, which discussed about both pros and cons of the issue, we can see, that the advantages and disadvantages purely was dependent on how one uses it.
As said by Albus Dumbledore in Harry Potter, our choices define us far more than our abilities do. Every things has two sides. It is upto us, how we want to use it. In the example given above, instead of typing in our ipads, if we use apple pencil to write, we can both undersand the lecture properly and at the same time, reduce cutting of trees by not using paper thereby protecting the environment. This shows that, in the end, it is not the technology itself that diminishes a person's intelligence but how he/she might use it.If the person uses it for things where it is required and uses their own intelligence and creativity where it matters , a balance will be mantained and we can heap the maximum benefits of using technology in our everyday lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2927.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 580.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04655172414 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06148780385 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 328.0 215.323595506 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565517241379 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 942.3 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 6.24550561798 320% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 140.441477469 60.3974514979 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.9375 118.986275619 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.25 23.4991977007 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117604542446 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415182333143 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468148598828 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637732318861 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374888389417 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 14.1392134831 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 100.480337079 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.