At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disvantages?
In recent years, the number of young adults tends to be higher than a small population of oldsters in a lot of countries. In my opinion, I see the bright-side view of this argument.
On the one hand, how many youngsters are being boomed alarmingly so therefore the government faces to the unemployment. That’s the reason why the risk will be depressed economies and increase remarkably of committing a lot of crime. For example, in the developing countries, the percentage of young people is the highest so the government is taking policies to reduce unemployment. An enormous of people are not hired by companies so the majority of unemployment is unable to pay money for bread and butter.
On the other hand, some people believe that the government has enormous work fore which can create an economic performance from the employees have above-par income. Firstly, the youngster is more dynamic and creative to connect with other countries so they can contribute to the process of development where they are earning a living. Secondly, a country has progress economic will attract migrants from other areas. Moreover, it is possible to reduce the budget of financial on their shoulder that is invested in society welfare. In the UK, the rich-people might help in a variety of ways, from upgrading medical facilities and amenities to donating food for the poor-class. Finally, the community recognized that volunteer activities are took part in by them whom can take time to give a hand poor- people compare with the old-age.
In conclusion, although this issue has two sides but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages so I support that the young people give an inordinate of benefit about economic and society in the future
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 66, Rule ID: SO_THEREFORE[1]
Message: Use simply 'so' or 'therefore'.
Suggestion: so; therefore
... youngsters are being boomed alarmingly so therefore the government faces to the unemploymen...
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Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to reduce unemployment. An enormous of people are not hired by companies so the...
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Line 3, column 741, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...ecognized that volunteer activities are took part in by them whom can take time to g...
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Line 4, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...about economic and society in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05574912892 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89525443959 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588850174216 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0381126327 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.615384615 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112390830256 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352715137214 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384887093554 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742457232735 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408719652986 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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