The vice president for human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet inappropriately from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. Installing software on company computers to detect employees' Internet use is the best way to prevent employees from wasting time on the job. It will foster a better work ethic at Climpson and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president in his recommendation claims that installing monitoring software in employees' PCs will increase their productivity. This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the assumption that internet surfing is the only root for decreased productivity.
The argument fails to provide any justification that productivity of workers will increase when they stop waste their time playing games on computer. There are other ways to relax during work hours that does not include computer. It is known that employees like to take coffee or watercooler breaks. Hence, if the VP wants to improve situations the breaks have to be monitored as well.
Moreover, in the argument the author presumes that the work ethic will improve after these innovations. However, there is no evidence that it will be a case in this situation. Basic knowledge of human psychology and common sense suggest that installing of spying software on computers will not help to encourage diligence behavior.
Finally, the argument claims that monitoring internet use will help to increase profit. However, there might be other factors that affect company's success besides employees' Interne usage. For example, if the company is facing a bankruptcy because of bad investments then monitoring will not help to improve situation. To strengthen the author's argument there should be a survey or statistic that proves that insufficient internet usage is a main source for decreased profit.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions it fails to make a convincing case that monitoring employees' Internet use will improve their productivity and increase company's profit.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 261 350 //more content wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1407 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.391 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.822 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to improve situation. To strengthen the authors argument there should be a survey or st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 261.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53256704981 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88934110306 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544061302682 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4831046849 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2666666667 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151700781883 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548459896995 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443671603424 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.09484179167 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512608931993 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.