Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
decision making is a crucial part in anyone's life.we live in a modern and sophisticated daily life that needs a precise and fruitful decisions.but are youngsters nowadays more able to take their own decisions than their past peers? i strongly believe that young people at this time are less dependable on their parents.i feel this way for two reason ,which i will explore in the following essay.
to begin with,the massive advancement in technology is playing a major role in improving self dependence in children away from their parents. i mean it is the age of computers and communications worldwide.this technological lifestyle,provides a huge amount of information to children and eases their access to it.for example,most of children nowadays knows how to use tablets,they can order books and toys by themselves and under the supervision of their parents.duo to this,they become more confident and curious to solve their problems alone and so more dependent.for example,my niece orders her toys herself by using the internet and she do not find any difficulty in this.she is developed to be more reliant on herself that her parents.children have established more sense of self reliance than their peers did years ago.
moreover,the modernization of school system helped a lot to create more independent students,the sophisticated programs nowadays tend to get the students enrolled in activities rather than just listening to the he teacher,for example,they can make a presentation about something they are interested in.by searching through internet and make a perfect one!without the help of elder people.these experiences unveils that we are witnessing a new strong independent generation ,that is almost completely dependent from their parents.
in conclusion,though some may reject my reasons,but i truly believe that we encounter a generation that can take its decisions more freely than it was many years ago,not only because of the new technological approaches,but also because of the new progress in the teaching system which encourages young students to be involved in every aspect.i think parents should give their children the liberty in taking their own decisions,this will definitely help them in gaining more sense of responsibility at early ages .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, for example, i feel, i mean, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43909348442 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32642202208 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620396600567 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 20.1344086022 288% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 207.511445467 48.9658058833 424% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 320.0 100.406767564 319% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.8333333333 20.6045352989 286% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.6666666667 5.45110844103 306% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.5376344086 614% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239343470756 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127022633897 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511678825781 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150890214236 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857026466632 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.6 11.7677419355 286% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.15 58.1214874552 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.10430107527 280% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 10.1575268817 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.16 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.85 8.01818996416 135% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.2 10.0537634409 251% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.