TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The fundamental change in the society makes experiences less substantial. Thus, parents tend to interfere less with children's lives. In the meantime, children are able to enjoy more autonomy over their own affairs.
In the past society, parents are key determinants of young people's life. Also, the societal custom restrict young people to abiding by parents' desicions. parents' control over young people used to even reach such propostions that it was consolidated into the rules and legislations. For example, the spouse used to be determined by parents without referring to the feelings of young people themselves, let alone behaviors or careers, which are supposed to comply with parents' opinions. The social phenomenon is not completely irreasonable. Considering social circumstances at that time, parents' experiences can assist young people in eschewing obstacles in life and succeeding smoothly. Therefore, parents played a pivotal role in the young people's life in the past generations.
Whereas, the staggering development in the current society makes past experiences virtually lose their significances in forecasting the future. When parents realize that their experiences do not apply to the real word, they are inclined to put less constriants on young people's alternatives. Meanwhile, young people recognize the possibility of the new world. they will not put emerging things in the obsolete perspective. By continous trying, young people will gradually have a good command of the ever-changing society. it perhaps accompanies with a serious of failures, admittedly. Yet the ability to make decision in the life is significantly improved.
Furthermore, the social custom encourange young people to get rid of parents' shield and make decisions according to their own thoughts in this day and age. Contrary to the strict prohibition of disobeying the parents, we have a more opposite attitude to the unconventional decisions. Since nothing in the world is carved in stone. young people are encouraged to evaluate and make decision with regard of others' opinion. perhaps these avant garde decision will become part of golden rules to follow.
As the aforementioned arguments have presented, young people today have more freedom and automony over their own life. A young person is more regarded as an independent individual rather than part of their parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...people to abiding by parents desicions. parents control over young people used to even ...
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Line 2, column 740, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ents played a pivotal role in the young peoples life in the past generations. Whereas,...
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Line 2, column 778, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...g peoples life in the past generations. Whereas, the staggering development in the curr...
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Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...evelopment in the current society makes past experiences virtually lose their significances in f...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...gnize the possibility of the new world. they will not put emerging things in the obs...
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...d command of the ever-changing society. it perhaps accompanies with a serious of f...
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Line 4, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...titude to the unconventional decisions. Since nothing in the world is carved in stone...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Young
...othing in the world is carved in stone. young people are encouraged to evaluate and m...
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Line 4, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...decision with regard of others opinion. perhaps these avant garde decision will become ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50410958904 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01641720471 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553424657534 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7050814924 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7083333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2083333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95833333333 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411076584593 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111694253079 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734742268266 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221030189037 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510949628635 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.