TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things around the world. Actually, people's attitudes towards this issue are varied from person to person. Although many would argue that the internet creates problems, in my opinion, the technology help society and people to will become their life is easy and achieve their goals in different fields. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out the internet is a most important part of our lives. the efficiency of a society is measured by the degree and the quality of its use the internet and combine the information. Admittedly, many benefits quickly stem from the technology which we can easily access through the virtual world, the internet. Take an example technology helps car producers to prepare advanced and hi-tech vehicles in the market. many cars in the market have a navigation system. This system is seriously useful specifically in both large cities and off-road. you can imagine that you drive in a free-way. the navigation system which contains GPS and internet connection provides the best route for you. So, it can help us to save our time.
Secondly, the internet is omnipresent in our daily life. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guaranteed that the internet is a great teacher to build a character. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. the discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five percent of the young people indulge themselves on the internet to search and collect the information to help them at their work and in life.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that one of the most important in our lives today is an internet to discover a lot of things and has furnished us with astonishing means to access knowledge.Online applications play an essential role in modern societies and are going to educate the majority of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87272727273 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61879201644 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572727272727 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4806842774 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213217924686 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549683181893 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385398206924 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109771036749 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332766566179 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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