Most artists earn low salaries and therefore should receive findings from the government in order for them to continue with their work.
To what extent do you agree?
Two days ago, I read an article about artists who both are low-paid. The author said that artists and in need of financial support to working further. This leads one to wonder whether governments should pay extra money to them. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is that the job of artists is unprofitable for governments. Today, few people are willing to visit places of art, such as theaters, museums, exhibitions and concerts, so artists should not receive high salaries in comparison to those professions, which generate higher income to the economy. Besides their salaries, wealthy fans often give them money, cars and apartments as a form of recognition of their talents.
Another reason why governments should not pay extra money to artists is that they support more important areas. Teachers and medical workers earn as little salary as artists, but their work is more essential, since education prepares future engineers, and health care saves many lives from various diseases. If the government supported artists better, they would have to reduce the salaries of teachers and doctors.
However, some artists claim that the government should support them financially so that they could keep working in art. The reason is that financial support would help them to develope their skills. Artists occasionally can improve their skills since they take part-time jobs to support their families. However, if the government added extra pay to their salaries, they could totally immerse themselves in art and produce high-quality work in music, pictures, and stage performance. Despite this, nurturing good artists takes many years, and there is no guarantee that they will reach their goals. Thus, governments should focus on more important aspects of society, which can benefit the country and help people.
In conclusion, governments should not give an extra funding to artists, since art is not profitable and frivolous in comparison to other occupations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e low-paid. The author said that artists and in need of financial support to work...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, so, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62294562467 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.338023029 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.470588235 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265354387469 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086348417675 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250191112221 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141709913369 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426048887954 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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