It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Being a acknowledge is a valuable attribute for a person. Better if that person know about different subjects. It is really important being versatile in our life, instead of specialize in one particular area As a result we can benefitted from that. I think this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, many person focus their entire life in learning and improving just one area of knowledge, with realize how important is being versatile in a person's life. Knowing about different areas give you the possibility to obtain better jobs and gain more money. For example, a person who have two different career could improve their style of life and being successful in both. For instance, my brother is translator. He studied language in The University of Chicago. He specialized in French, but at the same time he loves sing in french. As a result, last year he participated in a sing competition where he won the first place and the prize was a travel to French with everything include. As you can see he not only dedicated his life studying, but also he took sing classes to enhance his performance during the competition.
Secondly, people should broad their knowledge. They must always increase their expectations in life. Knowing only about subject limit their possibilities to be successful in other areas of their life. For example a person who have a broad knowledge would have more possibilities than a person that just only know a particular subject. I remember last year my company had to select a person to participate in the Dentist Annual Meeting in San Francisco. They choose the dentist who had broadest knowledge in dentistry. I was not selected because I was not able to complete my Implantology mastery. As a result I could not participate in the Annual Meeting.
Finally, is crucial that all persons do not just focus in an specific subject, but also learn from a variety of subjects because it would be of a great benefit for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Being a acknowledge is a valuable attribute for...
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Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
Being a acknowledge is a valuable attribute for a person. B...
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Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
... one particular area As a result we can benefitted from that. I think this way for two rea...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I will explore in the following essay. First, many person focus their entire li...
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Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...e how important is being versatile in a persons life. Knowing about different areas giv...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'travel'.
Suggestion: travel
...e won the first place and the prize was a travel to French with everything include. As y...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is performance during the competition. Secondly, people should broad their know...
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Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'had the broadest'.
Suggestion: had the broadest
... Francisco. They choose the dentist who had broadest knowledge in dentistry. I was not selec...
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Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le to complete my Implantology mastery. As a result I could not participate in the...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...l that all persons do not just focus in an specific subject, but also learn from a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82991202346 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77780573673 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536656891496 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7829829792 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4285714286 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2380952381 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172774382038 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431873453046 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630601598398 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109001996931 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504844883511 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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