"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The above article, recommend that Monarch Books should open a café since it is in business for nearly twenty years and have large number of customers visiting their store, with a variety of books. Opening a café, will increase the number of customers visiting the store than the number of customers visiting now and would help Monarch café to compete with the Regal Books, who have just opened up a café. I agree with the recommendations with there are certain question needed to be answered before actually coming to a conclusion.
Firstly, opening a café would help the business for Monarch café, but a café would need space for the equipment necessary for the café, such as, chairs, chairs, tables, etc. Moreover, the café would need staff to handle the incoming customers and to fulfill their orders, which will also need space for the kitchen. The café staff would need training and increase in the expenditure for the café, which is one of the concerns.
To overcome the concerns of space, it has been suggested to drop the Children’s book section, since recent national census has stated a decrease in population under age ten. There is a flaw in the solution given for space, firstly, census is taken after every ten years, so till the next census it is possible that there might be an increase in population under age ten.
Secondly, it is not clear about the population under the age group who can have babies, so it is unclear, whether there will be no population under age ten. During the tenure of next ten years, the number of populations under age ten might increase and if the Children’s Book section is discontinued, there will be concerns related to Book section in future. A solution for space needs to be found so thatthe needs are sufficed for the expected results, alternatively, a smaller space can be allocated for Children’s section, as a solution for space. If parents with children wants to visit the Books store and café, they won’t be able to do so, since the Children’s section won’t be there.
The main essence of Monarch Books store, for having such a large customer base is that they have wide range of books, which has attracted customer for so long. Opening a café might increase the number of people visiting the store, who are visiting the café, hence concerns related to managing the crowd would increase. Thirdly it is said, opening a café would attract more customers and help the Monarch Books store to compete with Regal books, which has recently opened a café. Well it is difficult to foresee whether opening café would help boost the Monarch Books store business, which indirectly indicates whether opening a café would allow Monarch’s to compete with the Regal’s. There are various concerns about opening a café, which needs to be taken care of.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2256 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.661 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.343 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.662 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 354, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ill be concerns related to Book section in future. A solution for space needs to be found...
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Line 7, column 717, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ren's section won't be there. The main essence of Monarch Books store,...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...é, which needs to be taken care of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95435684647 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61086540656 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398340248963 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.5942143738 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.470588235 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3529411765 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317340733344 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130576908722 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995584942923 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192771471611 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104029452356 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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