the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by sjakhil on Sun, 08/18/2019 - 11:51

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of physical activity performed by the Australian men and women  belonging to different age groups.

 
Overall, the percentage of regular physical activity performed by male decreases while it increases for their counterparts as they grew old.

First, the percentage of physical activity carried out by men is higher than the women in the age group of 15-24, Whereas the percentage of physical activity in women is greater than men in the age group of 65 and over. The percentage of physical activity decreases in men from 52.8 percentile in the age group 15-24 to all time lowest of 39.5 in the age group of 35-44. Then it experiences an upward trend as the age progresses till 65 and above to the 46.7 percentile.
In women, the regular physical activity surges from 47.7 percentile in the age group 15-24 to the highest 53.3 percentile in 45-54 age group. However, it decreases slightly to 53% in the age group 55-64,and  Plunges more to the all-time low activity for the age group 65 and above.

Finally, to conclude that the percentage of physical activity performed by the females increases significantly as their age progresses while in men it decreases significantly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0931372549 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94471600744 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436274509804 0.547539520022 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 316.8 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7920489274 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.875 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32286349555 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17265619922 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931876244765 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207408390212 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841335144189 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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