The graph shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

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The graph shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

Submitted by Cherry06 on Sat, 08/31/2019 - 16:59

The provided bar chart compares the employment rate of male and female in six major countries from 1995 to 2005.

It is evident from the chart that males ranked the highest proportion of employment than females over a period of 11 years.

In Iceland about 82 percent got employed in 2005 and this was the largest recorded rate in the given countries. This percentage of jobs were all given to males. This were comparatively similar in the initial year (1995) that men were well beyond the average of employment rate than females which was approximately 31 percent higher than the females.

The second biggest trend in the graph was the improvement in employment between 1995 and 2005 in Switzerland. The figure of employed women improved. Although, men were still higher than females in terms of the ratio of employment in 2005 which was about 78 percent. However, females in this country were much higher in percentage who got the job than other countries from 1995 to 2005. Roughly 67% in 2005and 57% over the decade.

Furthermore, the proportion of employed men in 2005 were almost the same in the UK, New Zealand, The USA and Australia with 73%, 72%, 71%, and 68% respectively. There was an increase of almost 12% for men from 1995 to 2005. Whereas, Females had the lowest rate of employment in Australia and New Zealand which was roughly the same over a period of 11 years, which was just above 22% in 1995 and just beyond 35% in 2005.

However, the percentage of employed women went up to 12% over a period of 11 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 162, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[3]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...entage of jobs were all given to males. This were comparatively similar in the initi...
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Line 13, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... The figure of employed women improved. Although, men were still higher than females in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, second, still, well, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 965.302439024 134% => OK
No of words: 269.0 196.424390244 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79182156134 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50608910065 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453531598513 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 357.3 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9996279747 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0714285714 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165309776723 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715108840677 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491595508407 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979824187483 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548678371213 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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