Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade(mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Nobody could doubt that it is increasingly competitive in school among students in order to get high grade and excellent academic performance. Therefore, there are some occasions when some parents offer their kids money in order to inspire them to obtain good mark. From my perspective, it is not a wise action and it doesn't contribute to their kids' mental health.
Primarily, children could be obscure of the aim to study. If parents always relate grades to money, their kids would probably associate study with money automatically. As it is known to us that it is the knowledge that makes humans progressive. How superficial it is to attribute the reason of acquiring knowledge to making money. Nevertheless, we could create huge wealth if we are knowledgeable and capable enough. But the goal of studying never lies on money. For example, what our teachers always advice us is that how to make ourselves a better person to help needless people and make contributions to the society. Additionally, there are also crowds who don't have a high degree could make much money. But one of the most important aims of education is to train pioneers who are not only proficient in their fields but have strong ethic awareness towards the society. And the behavior to remind kids of money is somehow losing the education of their moral values.
On the other hand, it will enable children to develop misunderstanding of money. We should not educate children to concentrate on the issue of money. There are many critical things to us in our life. Actually, the frequent reference of money will allow children to attach more importance to it than they should be. Parents should let teenagers know that money is not the only measuring standard and it can't replace many of more valuable things. For instance, love, sincerity and sympathy for others all couldn't be substituted. When there is an emergency, the braveness appears on the face of firefighters is so precious that they could save the lives of thousands people even at the expense of sacrificing themselves. In my opinion, parents could use more practical and emotional encouragement or bonus in order to praise kids' processes, such as a gift, company or some delicious food supplied for them.
Indeed, it is a kind of approach to make kids more motivated to pursue higher grades sometimes because money could be used to buy a lot of things they need. But this kind of "gift" are supposed be controlled to a suitable frequency which will not ruin children's monetary sense.
In a nutshell, I don't think it is a proper way to use money as a media to inspire kids’ study. Because at the still young age, they haven’t formed a value of the world and correct view of money, they are not suitable to be educated induced by money which could be deteriorate to their development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90495867769 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81593606747 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526859504132 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.922550017 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.96 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.36 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272577253888 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670557929858 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545381712155 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149626007573 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613573832124 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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