You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to
camp organizers and say:
– Describe the areas where you can help.
– Give the time period you are available.
– Ask some questions about the camp.
Dear Sir,
I am Thompson and writing this letter with the reference in the advertisement on 10/10/2017 in Daily Herald Newspaper. The said commercial is about ''requirement of helpers for children summer holiday camp''. I would like to apply for this post as I have relevant work experience in the job. I am a trained swimmer and have conducted swimming classes earlier children. I also worked as rescuer for adults who are trained in swimming. I am also trained in Karate and other marshal arts. I was training adults and children for self defense classes in community owned center club.
However, recently I started to work for a Software Company, hence quit that job as it was inconsistent for my full time job. Your advertisement says that you required part time work seekers who can work for early morning shift for weekdays and afternoon for weekends which perfectly suits my time. As my office working hours are from 10 am - 6.30 pm I can spend morning shifts from 5 - 7.30 am. During weekends I will join the club from 2 - 5 pm. Kindly let me know other details of the children camp like what are other activities planned for children,details of camp organisers ,duration, wages for helpers, procedure for applying job etc. I hope my working times and other details suits your need.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am Thompson and writing this letter wi...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cted swimming classes earlier children. I also worked as rescuer for adults who a...
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Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...for adults who are trained in swimming. I am also trained in Karate and other mar...
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Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ained in Karate and other marshal arts. I was training adults and children for se...
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Line 9, column 111, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... that job as it was inconsistent for my full time job. Your advertisement says that you r...
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Line 9, column 168, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ur advertisement says that you required part time work seekers who can work for early mor...
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Line 9, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...weekends which perfectly suits my time. As my office working hours are from 10 am ...
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Line 9, column 553, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , details
...re other activities planned for children,details of camp organisers ,duration, wages for...
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Line 9, column 580, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... for children,details of camp organisers ,duration, wages for helpers, procedure f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 223.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81614349776 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68780817559 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62331838565 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6760533146 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6153846154 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1538461538 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15384615385 4.34317383033 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201032316987 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691048373414 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812393985353 0.0603063233224 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151715528229 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00975423954545 0.0580467560999 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.