In the future, it is expected that there will be higher proportion of older people in some countries. Is this positive or negative development?
Nowadays, in many countries, the increasing proportion of elderly citizens is a result of low fertility rate combined with high life expectancy. While this trend maybe positive to some extents, I would argue that it is more negative.
It is undeniable that elderly people uphold traditional value and accumulate precious experiences. Therefore, young generations can inherit these extraordinary lessons easily when they work and live with older people. That also means knowledge and culture are transmitted from one generation to the next one. Additionally, in modern life, when both parents are busy with working and earning money, grandparent are ready to help to take care grandchildren with all love and conscientiousness. Hence, both parent can keep their mind on their work to contribute the best effort for companies and they also can save childcare cost.
Despite of above advantages, demographic tendency are altering relation within and across generations, creating new government responsibilities and changing many aspects of social life. The aging and decline of the working-age population has triggered concerns about the future of the nation’s workforce, the potential for economic growth and solvency of the nation pension and healthcare services.
Firstly, there is an increase of older-age workers in workforce, labor market is under pressure to meet demand for worker with the number of job-seekers is lower than figure of available jobs as older generations retire and younger generation become smaller in quantity.
Secondly, the decline in working-aged cohorts may lead to shrinking economy if productivity does not increase faster than the rate of decreasing workforce. This causes a heavy financial burden on young generations and stagnant economy of society in the long term.
Thirdly, due to mounting labor shortage, many companies need to increase the mandatory retirement age and allow employee to continue working after official retirement. The growing number of retirement age has put strain on pension system and shortfalls in pension fund have encouraged many people of retirement age to remain in workforce. Additionally, a net decline in population due to a low birth rate has raised issue of immigration as a way to compensate for labor shortages. However, expansion in working –age migrants from other countries has struggled to overcome cultural barriers and strict condition to accept refugee into country.
In conclusion, while the increasing aged population has several positive impacts, I believe the drawback of this tendency is much greater.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, in many countries, the increasing proportio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 396.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58080808081 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03377221452 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6944871858 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0826272614729 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285118769951 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381270263801 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048373845657 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475925087302 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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