In my country, young people have a better life today than their parents enjoyed when they were young
Today’s younger generation have all necessary commodities that our parents did not have. Nevertheless, I do not believe that mileniums have a better life than their parents. I will explain in the following essay.
First, sixty years ago life was much slower. Our parents and granparents lived a more relax and down to earth life. they did not worry about technology or travel, the only thing that concerned them was to put food on their families’s plate. Furthermore, they used to work from early morning till dusk, when night tome came, it was time to relax with their families and have a quite family dinner. All in all, I believe, this kind of quite life is a much bettter one than today’s younger generation running up and down, getting in debt before they even start a job, like is happening with college students.
Second, people live and die in their own town.Sixty years ago, people did not dream of living some where else. They whole world was their own town or city. In addtion, people that study and become professionals, they usual return to their town to help the community. On the contrary, millenums, their sole ambitious is to live in cosmopolitan cities, and strive to become millionaires before their 30 birthday, like I read last week, in a article regarding young people in Hong Kong. This kind of hassles create stress and poor health, eventually deteriorating the quality of life of the person.
Lastly, our parents and granparents die of old age. Nowadays , people suffer from all kind of diseases related to strees and anxiety. No wonder, their lifes has become a line of events that they need to accomplished by certain time and certain places, otherwise, there are consider failures. Constantaly, their lifes are judged through social media. The rate of suicide has increased, the used of libarated stress drugs, like heroine and morfine has shoot up exponentially. On the contarry our parents and granparents did not suffer from this type of events, to me they quite life was a much better quality of life than it is today with young people.
By way of conclusion, I believe that today’s milleniums live a drepressing kind of life. Our parents and granparnets used to have a much better quality of life.
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do—rather that doing thigs they should do. 68
- The knowledge we gain from personal experiences is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books 70
- In twenty years there will be fewer cars than there is today 70
- It is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specifc subject. 3
- People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, lastly, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, as to, kind of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91884816754 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70296659251 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531413612565 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8636359571 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4761904762 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1904761905 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348455895988 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980762097618 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06784610148 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205338784756 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032306234024 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.