The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar chart compares the earnings from sales of various games for four different platforms, namely mobile phones, online, consoles and handheld devices in the period from 2000 to 2006.

It is clear from the chart that handheld games were the most popular type in term of income from 2000 to 2006 . The bar chart also showed that console games tended to decrease, while the sales of mobile phone games and online games grew quickly

In 2000, the total earnings for the handheld games were at nearly $12 billions , which was double than that for console games. Mobile games and online games did not appear until 2002, the sales figures for both types was just $3 billions. Handheld games sales grew up $ 4 billions from 2000 to 2002, while console games decreased $ 2 billions.

In 2006, handheld games continued tobe a major revenues and its earnings is about $18 billion in revenues. There is a decrease in the sales of console games, with a low of $5 billions at the same time. Meanwhile, earnings for mobile and online games grew up to $ 9 and $ 7 billions in respectively

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75268817204 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28863435748 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521505376344 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1436494628 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.375 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304667957948 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155194764566 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451050795109 0.0843802449381 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210329003612 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315969970903 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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