Nowadays some older people choose to live in retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development？
With people grow older, they need more professional treatment and careful caring which their adult kids may not offer. So some of them go to retirement communities or hospital to live with other people. I believe this phenomenon brings more merits then demerits to both elder people and adults.
There is no doubt that sending seniors to retirement communities can reducing adults’ pressure in providing health caring to their elder parents. Young adults need to spend more time on work for their future promotion so it means they have to spend less time with their family members, their elder parents, mostly. When adult children go outside to work, old people have to stay at home alone and they may feel isolate which may cause mental problems to them in a long term. Moreover, being alone at home also means elder people acquire no help when they meet emergencies such as slip on floor or fall down from stage. So when retirement communities can provide caring equipment and a place for many elder people to chat and live, there is no strange for why many old people want to live in it.
However, send olds to retirement communities also brings new problems. Firstly, it may cause financial pressure toward adult children since some retirement communities need expensive pay. Secondly, old people may also feel lonely and uncomfortable without their kids in life. I believe even if olds live in retirement communities, it also necessary for their kids to visit to them frequently. And I think good caring in communities give more benefits than being abandon at home to elder people. Since dangerous emergency can be avoided and elders can get immediate help if they have problems.
To summarize, I advocate that it can give more advantages if elder people live in retirement communities.
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, i think, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00993377483 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57402148341 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516556291391 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8324781735 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.866666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294441788758 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112540638681 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881921715174 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207192770418 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06558062995 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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