Governments should introduce healthcare which prevents illness rather than cures it. How far do you agree with this statement?
Nowadays, there is an extremely expensive expenditure spent on Healthcare services by the government. While some people argue that this money should be utilized for preventing illnesses rather than curing them, others agree to the opposite side of this idea. From my point of views, I completely disagree with the statement that governments should pay money for the prevention of diseases.
On the one hand, it is clear that many types of illnesses are simple to avoid such as coldness, or fever. This means that it is possible for the government to allocate money for preventing these diseases that would prevent citizens from suffering. Furthermore, the money that required to restrict disorders is always cheaper and more affordable so that if the government spend their financial budgets in this way, not only more citizens will be safe from various diseases, but also saving a considerable amount of money that can be used for another aspect. Due to the lower expenditure, the country, as a result, can develop faster and people's living conditions thus also improve. So, governments should then accompanies more grants for preventing illness.
On the other hand, while the state should spend money on preventing diseases, there are still several reasons why some financial supports are unavoidable in curing diseases. The first reason for this is that many complicated illnesses cannot be prevented effectively. For example, cancer, which is one of the most complex illnesses, is extremely difficult to identify its prompts, as a result, it is almost impossible to block this disease. Only if every illness is simple to realize that we could be able to pay money for preventing diseases. Moreover, many diseases are inevitable that can come from incidents, natural disasters or unfortunates. If the state does not allocate any costs for curing diseases, these people, therefore, could have to suffer. In other words, it is not possible for everyone in order to escape from being ill.
To conclude, whereas money should be spent on preventing diseases, in my opinion, it is much more essential for governments to create financial help for curing extreme illness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23428571429 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.760070984 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534285714286 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8469461319 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227074835874 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831707386225 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679670016769 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165463400885 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847536379118 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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