Some people think money is the most important factor when choosing a job
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are widely different views as to whether amount of revenue should be deciding factor in individuals' career choices. In my opinion, there are more important motives to influence people's working lives, which are often neglected in favour of high income.
To begin with, it may appear natural for human being to prioritize becoming high earner above all other concerns. The people living in a competitive modern society , are often challenged by constant struggles to make sufficient amount of money to cover their excessive expenses. Alternatively, those who own family are overwhelmed with efforts to secure future of their children. These individuals, in most of the cases, are left no alternative but to opt for the job with high income at the cost of their desired occupation. However, given the possible distress and dissatisfaction with the job that may arise later on, I think people are less likely to keep up with the position, and therefore, failing to support themselves and families in the long term.
There are number of more important factors that could ensure employment prosperity. To illustrate, many people seek for satisfaction and contentment in a job rather than promising salary. Provided people acquire fulfillment from their profession, they are even more likely to earn extra perks by working with more passion. To take an example of teaching and nursery, which are rarely well-paid jobs, teachers and nurses can be motivated by the job itself to work harder and end up with financial incentives in the form of recognition for their diligence. Therefore money should not be seen as key factor when talking about any career.
To conclude, I believe that high income is not the most significant in choosing a job. Admittedly, there are concerns over family and individual expenses, but the role of job satisfaction and contentment should not be taken for granted.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as to, i think, talking about, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16558441558 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80790544867 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8622057369 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.642857143 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169356660846 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611137127589 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432222770344 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102103017668 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209345472986 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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