Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Over the last few years it has been seen that the role of education has become very intertwined with the lives of young adults. While some believe that adolescents should pursue higher studies others argue that they should help build the society by taking up jobs such as construction workers, car mechanics and the likes. I agree with the former completely and will emphasize my opinion through examples.
Firstly, when young people take up hands-on jobs at an early age, they start to learn by working. The ability to learn how to do a job is best learnt by doing it. By starting off in their early years, youngsters spend more time gaining experience about a job. For example, my cousin is the best plumber in town. This is because he started doing it at a ripe age of 18 years. Furthermore young people the society by adding to its GDP. This is because young people start earning early in life and thus start contributing financially for a longer duration compared to others who start later.
That being said, education empowers young people to go after better job opportunities and also solve society's complex problems. Education has been a platform where one can improve their knowledge. This knowledge acts as an essential tool for them to go after high paying jobs that not only improve their financial status but also give them the opportunity to take on problems that have been plaguing the world for decades. For example, a study conducted by the education department of the state of Arizona showed that students who pursue their academics further added 30% more GDP in comparison to the average citizen. Also they were responsible for solving 90% of the problems in the fields of science and business.
To summarize, although working at an earlier age would help younger people in terms of experience and finance, it is my opinion that young people will contribute more to themselves and the society by pursuing their higher academics, since it will help them get strong financially and fix the bigger issues of the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, thus, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85673352436 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50213987121 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567335243553 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1508835705 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9375 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225098672267 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682889307656 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624653547602 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133998327954 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339278613033 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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