Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important.
Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.
Some would argue that child's growth is majorly influence by social factors, while others think that their parents are the most crucial factor to consider. Although, children development are guilded by external forces, I believe family play the major role in their upbringing.
On the one hand, children these days have access to unrestricted technology such as TV, Music and friends. In other words, they watch and listen to different languages on the television where they subsequently copy and immitate their role models in order to live and become like them as they grow up. For instance, in the UK, many children indulge in drug addition due to the fact that their mentors are mostly celebrities. Also, children move and interact with their peers from different background and this leads to them trying to live beyond standard so as to oppress their friends.
On the other hand,most children grow up with their family members who nurture them. This is because as they are growing up,the parents ensures they are well behaved and also they choose the kind of friend they interact and spend time with. For example, parents always want their youngster to associate with children from a peaceful home because a child who is from a disconnected home tend to be aggressive in nature. This is why parents are considered to be the most important .
In Conclusion, while there are external factors that affects child's growth, I agree that family members are the most important factor. I recommend that children ought to be nurtured by their family members especially during their early years
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04166666667 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47848413117 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57196969697 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3722825099 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.916666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126697201948 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562461704581 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512465126136 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935279736217 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459965265676 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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