Some people say that the government should spend more money taking care of elderly people while others think that government spending should be spent more on the education of young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people hold that the provision of necessary facilities for senior citizens should be more significant to ensure the development of social welfare. However, I am in favor of a larger proportion of domestic funds to be allotted to the education system which gives rise to the number of well-rounded citizens for the growth of economy.
On the one hand, to ensure the high level of social welfare in a country, the government is obliged to invest money in improving the living standards of old citizens. This acts as a reward for their hard work and life-long contribution to the development of their society. Those investments in healthcare facilities such as the construction of more hospitals to provide free medical treatments can help relieve the hardship old people endure because they are prone to serious diseases. For instance, medical services provided in public hospitals for Vietnamese citizens aged 65 or older are fully covered by the government. This financial support has helped a lot of senior citizens, especially the underprivileged, receive proper treatments and improve the quality of their life.
On the other hand, I contend that more government budgets should be spent on the reform of national education. Since the youth is the driving force for the economic, cultural and scientific advancements of a nation, investments in the development of young people are more rewarding. Apparently, a well-structured education system empowers them to acquire academic expertise and relevant job skills before they enter the job market and enhance the quality of the workforce. As a result, a leap in the number of high-skilled workers will precipitate an increase in Gross Domestic Product and subsequently a rise in national funds as well as other necessary allocations including healthcare.
In conclusion, I support the view that more federal funds should be allocated to educational projects for the youth rather than healthcare programs for the old because the leap in the number of productive residents can result in the development of economy which in turn replenishes the government coffers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, however, if, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30860534125 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05677448404 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53412462908 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.4519732912 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.083333333 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202466985792 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767391494752 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775748676801 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129819130602 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040977435597 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.