Many people prefer to communicate with their online friends than to socialize with people in their local communities. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantage.
Due to the significant development of social media, it is widely believed that humans nowadays prefer to communicate with their online peers than to have real interaction with local residents. Although there are several merits which relate to this recent trend, I consider the setbacks may outweigh the advantageous aspects.
On the other hand, I understand why many people of the fervent conviction argue that interacting with peers via social network is more benefifical. Firstly,it is widely claimed that socializing online can help people widen the circle of friends with similar interests, which might not always happen with the local communities. For instance, thanks to the emergence of Facebook or Instagram, young generation can easily find the people share similar habits with them, leading to a more delighted life. Moreover, humans have more opportunities to enhance their knowledge about different culture and tradition around the world. By connecting with foreign peers, online users are introduced about cultural aspects of their peers’s countries, gradually leading to the union of the world.
Despite the merits described above, several disadvantages related to this issue may come as an expense and outweigh the positive sides. Firstly, the preference to online communication is the potential factor which leads to the loss of real-life relationships. In addition, If humans only focus on maintaining their online interaction, they will gradually forget about how to strike up new relationships with local neighborhood, leading to the society’s partition. Secondly, people are confined into a virtual world and emotional status, which is far different from a real- personal relationship. As a result, many people, especially youngsters, not only experience mental-related problems such as depression, anxiety but also find it difficult to turn back to the normal real life.
Taking everything into consideration, although online socialization can bring some indispensible advantages, I believe many visible drawbacks go beyond the borders and outweigh the merits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70607028754 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03795733053 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629392971246 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.953681046 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 137.384615385 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374016064687 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116908470068 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816396303229 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209907872312 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840061258381 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.38 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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