Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they
are a complete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.
Many people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational that focus children's time on an academic environment is the right thing to do, otherwise, it will be a total waste of time.
I disagree with this idea not entirely but, most of it. I believe in a different approach to get the most of our children's time. The main focus should be good formal education followed up by one or two different activities such as playing a sport or playing the piano as an example. Both activities will help the child to develop other aptitudes apart from academic ones.
For example, playing a sport is an effective way to let the child begin a relationship with others apart from their homes and families. Although, is not an academic task it will help the child development of social behavior and awareness.
In my personal experience, I was an outstanding student at top of my class, good at maths and science but, with some troubles relating to other children of my age. So My mom signed me up at the local baseball academy almost against my will at the time. Twenty years later I am grateful to her for making me do something that I wouldn't have done without her push. That baseball academy helps me to develop social aptitudes that allow me to grow and learn things that matter daily such as teamwork, communication, and respect for others. I am a big believer that children's leisure time shouldn't be focus only on academic activities but, on activities that will help the child in their future in society.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...get the most of our childrens time. The main focus should be good formal education followe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...o her for making me do something that I wouldnt have done without her push. That baseba...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 585, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ig believer that childrens leisure time shouldnt be focus only on academic activities bu...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, apart from, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70411985019 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64361645011 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543071161049 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3521593721 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190691129103 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732468613708 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812398597663 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1402727094 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101494237394 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...get the most of our childrens time. The main focus should be good formal education followe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...o her for making me do something that I wouldnt have done without her push. That baseba...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 585, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ig believer that childrens leisure time shouldnt be focus only on academic activities bu...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, apart from, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70411985019 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64361645011 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543071161049 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3521593721 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190691129103 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732468613708 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812398597663 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1402727094 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101494237394 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.