It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essence of social aspects. While I partly agree with this idea, other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot be overlooked.
On the one hand, it is believed that some social problems related to the environment and transportation is becoming increasingly should be shown on TV. In terms of environmental events, some plants have discharged water that not be treated properly directed to the river, leading to detrimental damage to water sources where residents nearby living. As a result, a number of people suffer from malignant diseases such as colon cancer. This phenomenon should be announced widely in order to help citizens aware of regions where they are inhibiting as looking for effective ways, such as filtering water before cooking and drinking, to protect their health in this situation. From the perspective of transportation, as the worsening of the atmosphere worldwide due to gas emission from large private transportation, the authorities could raise citizens' awareness about this matter through TV channels. This would be also a productive and simple measure to alleviate air pollution by encouraging people to use public means of transport via TV programmes.
On the other hand, I would argue that other things, apart from social issues, is cruel to human beings. Firstly, it is undeniable that some channels for the purpose of humor is dispensable. Watching the Disney channel, for example, could help teenagers and adolescences release stress after exhausted working-days. Without these entertainment channels, human lives would be monotonous and tedious. Besides, the youth can consider celebrities who appear on TV shows as role models for them to follow up and get motivated. Secondly, people can broaden their knowledge and enhance their horizons about geography and novel inventions through travel advertisement and news. Even people who are always up to the ears can keep up with the last news by simply listening to TV programmes.
In conclusion, although the information about social development is important, it seems to me that other issues including advertising and ways to relaxing cannot be underestimated.
It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essence of social aspects. While I partly agree with this idea, other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot be overlooked.
On the one hand, it is believed that some social problems related to the environment and transportation is becoming increasingly should be shown on TV. In terms of environmental events, some plants have discharged water that not be treated properly directed to the river, leading to detrimental damage to water sources where residents nearby living. As a result, a number of people suffer from malignant diseases such as colon cancer. This phenomenon should be announced widely in order to help citizens aware of regions where they are inhibiting as looking for effective ways, such as filtering water before cooking and drinking, to protect their health in this situation. From the perspective of transportation, as the worsening of the atmosphere worldwide due to gas emission from large private transportation, the authorities could raise citizens' awareness about this matter through TV channels. This would be also a productive and simple measure to alleviate air pollution by encouraging people to use public means of transport via TV programmes.
On the other hand, I would argue that other things, apart from social issues, is cruel to human beings. Firstly, it is undeniable that some channels for the purpose of humor is dispensable. Watching the Disney channel, for example, could help teenagers and adolescences release stress after exhausted working-days. Without these entertainment channels, human lives would be monotonous and tedious. Besides, the youth can consider celebrities who appear on TV shows as role models for them to follow up and get motivated. Secondly, people can broaden their knowledge and enhance their horizons about geography and novel inventions through travel advertisement and news. Even people who are always up to the ears can keep up with the last news by simply listening to TV programmes.
In conclusion, although the information about social development is important, it seems to me that other issues including advertising and ways to relaxing cannot be underestimated.
- It is true that each country need to have rules and laws that all citizens must comply Some people argue that residents should be allowed to be free to do whatever they want I strongly believe that legislation is essential to ensure social safety To begin 89
- The line graph given illustrates the number of air pollutants discharged from various sources in the UK during the period from 1999 to 2005 Overall it is evident that the figure for total air pollutants reduced tremendously over the given period Meanwhile 73
- The pie charts illustrate the proportion of citizens working in three categories in two Towns in two different years 1960 and 2010 It is evident that the number of people working in sales was largest in both towns in 1960 Besides Town A and town B both sa 67
- It is said that the majority of television programmes had better concentrate on educating the young generation about the essence of social aspects While I partly agree with this idea other issues such as advertisement or entertainment cannot be overlooked 89
- the first man to walk on the moon said it was a great step for mankind But space travel has made little difference in most people s lives To what extent do you agree or disagree 74
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, look, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42816901408 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06051638835 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605633802817 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9547654664 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.4375 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336798156461 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105869135042 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160482438778 0.0667982634062 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305789736573 0.151304729494 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.327497671213 0.056905535591 576% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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