Some people believe the purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Education is a backbone of every country. There is a school of thought considering that the aim of education ought to help people pursue their dreams, yet the other claims that society should take an advantage of education. I agree with the latter one since doing so makes everything work although odds do not work.
Being familiar on how to do things properly to achieve a certain result is an integral part of society. I acknowledge that when people are adequately taught relatively on their professions, society functions in a way that everyone gets benefit. In fact, educating individuals to go after things that they want is likely to flourish the lives of millions since they are instructed for finding a better approach to deal with certain problems. For example, if an individual dreaming of becoming an entrepreneur is educated on the basis of entrepreneurship and skills that matter most such as communication and technology, not only do they become fully satisfied with their primary decision and help society through creating new vacancies in their company. Thus, an education system should be based on developing the skills of individuals who contribute to society in the end.
Focusing only on individuals’ ambitions to some extend poses a threat to society. In other words, the authentic function of education should therefore be concentrated on the individuals’ role in the society, not on their imaginary goals. People who advocate this view perhaps analyze how society is benefited. That being said, while I concede that education familiarizes people with thing that they do not have an idea of, it can lead people to make the world a better place. For instance, if school and university curriculums interchangeably educate students on the chain of society, those who are studying may take responsibility to take actions on tackling issues ranging from medicine to social life, becoming a strategically planned member of the world and achieving dreams that are real and urgent.
In conclusion, educating people to help them chase what they wish can be of great importance since they probably create more workplaces. However, I think that a better way to help people is to show them real-life scenarios and possible solutions to problems in areas of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
... only on individuals’ ambitions to some extend poses a threat to society. In other wor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15053763441 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93992633243 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.700965245 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.733333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306669502786 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101877587745 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632175207161 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180498867509 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516585064645 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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