Some people think that work is the most important aspect of people’s life. Without a successful career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A school of thought contends that life would become pointless without employment success. Although I accept the importance of a desirable career, I would argue that there are several other factors that also contribute to fulfillment and happiness in life including mental well-being and family bonds.
The first potential justification of the yearning for employment achievements is that an outstanding occupation would enhance the living standards of workers themselves. Therefore, a myriad of job holders are willing to extend their working hours to maximise their earnings and satisfy their bosses in the hope of future promotion. However, one fact that might be ignored is that this tendency is at the expense of their own mental health, rendering multiple stress-related illnesses such as anxiety, depression and even nervous breakdown if these problems persist. As a result, even when those working around the clock attained successful feats at work, they would still feel discontented because their psychological well-being suffers.
Another argument that can be given for the desire for career success is that high achievers would be able to prove self-worth and gain recognition from their social circles. This notion might be true but some advocates of this belief appear to underate the values of family in providing a great source of emotional support, which is vital in times of adversity. Getting immersed in the working pace and social interactions, those people fail to fulfill parents and marriage partners’ responsibilities, consequently causing constant family conflicts. Ultimately, at the height of materialistic wealth and career ladder with respected reputation, one would likely experience a feeling of loneliness and dissatisfaction due to family loss and a sense of regret.
In conclusion, while undoubtedly, enormous benefits can be gained from a glittering career, it is my opinion that without other parameters such as mental health and family connection, one’s life cannot be fulfilled.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57792207792 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04200507994 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633116883117 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.7036377597 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.181818182 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138665836711 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562347511148 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537045301404 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949028583128 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529523227282 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.46 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57792207792 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04200507994 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633116883117 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.7036377597 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.181818182 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138665836711 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562347511148 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537045301404 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949028583128 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529523227282 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.46 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.