It is more important for the government to spend money on promoting the healthy lifestyle to prevent the illness rather than on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Health problems are becoming more important than ever around the globe. While some people think that the state should spend more money on improving individual’s health, I would argue that it is more necessary for doctors to cure people who are facing disease.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the body legal should promote the healthy lifestyle. Firstly, the life is getting harsher, individuals are more likely to choose fast foods than prepared meals. Therefore, the government should limit the amount of fast food consumed by increasing tax rate on the revenue and advertising campaigns. As a result, they will use less harmful products than before and the amount of residents suffer obesity could reduce. Secondly, the sedentary lifestyle is currently common, especially with office workers, this could lead to some diseases like diabetes or cardiopathy. Hence, the government should invest money on constructing sport facilities and hold competitions for non-professionals. These methods could encourage people to do more exercises and to participate in creational activities to improve healthy status.
However, I believe that protecting people in emergency conditions is more essential. For example, many countries in the world are experiencing the outbreaks of the covid 19 epidemic and a huge number of patients are in danger. Therefore, the government need to provide machines for those people rather than those who have a good health. Furthermore, many serious diseases does not just come from lacking physical activities or having bad eating habits. A child can be seen cancer because they are heritable from their parents. Hence, the state should build more hospitals even in poor villages to help people overcome dangerous diseases.
In conclusion, while spending money on improving people’s health is crucial, I would believe that the state should support the treatment for citizens who are not luck to suffer diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42950819672 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79401979722 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622950819672 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3025313415 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273201970822 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079199482077 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627528330057 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171517596787 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295707638139 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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