It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than the world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, history has been one of the most necessary fields of knowledge that people, especially students, should be taught. There exists an opinion that arquiring the local history is much more essential than the history of the globe. In my perspective, I totally agree with this idea for several reasons.
To begin with, learning about the local history helps to raise the school children’s patriotism as well as their responsibility towards their country. They will be informed of the ancestors’ contribution and achievement throughout the nation’s development. For example, Vietnam suffered from hundreds of wars to defend the territory from the cruel invaders. Therefore, Vietnamese students absolutely need to be informed of this field of knowledge to take pride of what happened in the past. To make it better, they must take actions to continue the glorious national tradition on protecting and developing their country.
In addition, it is more straightforward for pupils to study about the history of their country. In fact, they have heard multiple short historic stories from the adults since they were young. Many historic famous names are quite familiar with them as they are exposes to frequently on their daily lives. In several countries over the world, the importantly historic buildings or the well-known roads are named after these characters, for instance. This is also an effective way to educate children about the national history as well.
To conclude, I strongly believe that more emphasis should be placed on the history of the students’ local areas. Although they also need to be informed of the international history, what belongs directly to where they were born still play an more significant role due to its importance to the students’ awareness and its ease of reception.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31141868512 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85578881345 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7731121872 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319163929963 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102928398959 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097783612056 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183364536841 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389709966825 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.