Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every mass media jostle to report news of entertainers and athletes to enhance the attention to their news. Thus, we can often find that many of them complain or denounce the media on their Facebook or Instagram to convey their discontent. This issue also causes many discussion and come into focus. In my view, they indeed need more privacy. More perspectives and proof will be shed light in the following.
First and foremost, those athletes and entertainers are ordinary people just like us. As common people, we urgently own privacy, so why we can request those publics should provide their daily life? We should put ourselves in their place to think about what problem they encountered because the saying in Taiwan goes "What you do not want to be done to yourself, do not do to others. ". When one day we are surrounded by cameras that we cannot see, we might be afraid and restless. Therefore, we should be empathetic to their right to privacy.
In addition, none privacy means that every behavior they do might be amplified scrutinized by the public. Long-term pressure of viewing is detrimental to entertainers and athletes. Moreover, the Internet causes the news to spread quickly, which makes them feel under pressure because they are anxious about their movement that results in dissatisfaction from the public. This stress may influence their spirit so that their performance in their field must decline, which all fans are not willing to see. Thence, sacrificing our curiosity to exchange their prominent performance must let us more enlighted.
Indeed, celebrities' behaviors are possibly the spiritual support and the goal which people want to pursue, so many people urgently get more information and news from them. However, we should concentrate on their performance not on their privacy, because knowing these details have no advantage for us. The key to why their success has already been shown to everyone, which is the serious training that allows them to brighten their achievement. In other words, celebrities' privacy isn't vital information for us to inspire our spirit or encourage when we are depressed.
In conclusion, it is significant for everyone to own privacy, same to athletes and entertainers. Thus, respect is the only way to support them in order to let them thrive to themselves and us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun discussion seems to be countable; consider using: 'many discussions'.
Suggestion: many discussions
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0859375 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.731649187 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552083333333 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7211938722 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0955501438872 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324332994755 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298252639934 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559669590703 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00767660178281 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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