Task 2: Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this era, it is common to see celebrities become well-known not because of their aptitudes but their properties and luxurious items they use on a daily basis, which are disadvantageous for many young people since they can take after these celebrities as a formula to be successful. Personally, I totally agree with this statement as young adolescents can be instilled a detrimental idea of underestimating abilities and efforts
On the one hand, these celebrities can be a great motivation for adolescents to thrive their best to become wealthy like them. As we are living in a hectic life and the highest target of every worker is to earn a lucrative income. Though the achievement of one individual is the outcome of their efforts and hardship, adolescents seem to be impressed more by those who have a wealth-off life because that is their dream. As a result, the more celebrities are known by their financial background, the more young people get influenced and start getting down to work seriously
However, this trend can be extremely harmful to the adolescents whose conscious are still immature, as they can neglect the importance of accomplishing, potentially leading to be involved in corruption. Specifically, they would tend to undervalue the process of reaching a goal but focus only on the results. Basically, because these stars become famous since they have a lavish lifestyle, this can be a bad image for young people as they will not try their best to become wealthy but take a shortcut or even trade their morality to earn more money to be successful. For instance, a singer instead of participating in more vocal course can deliberately create scandals to take his or her country by storm and then become well-known and start earning money from endorsement
In conclusion, it is a topic of interest when there are more and more people adore artists just because of their glamorous images on social media. From my perspective, this is a disastrous trend and the beginning of a new generation that just concentrate on money and try all cost to make as much money as these stars
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- The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
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- The graph below gives information about U S government spending on research between 1980 and 2008 78
- The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 81
- Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life Is it a positive or negative development 78
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94366197183 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95827493602 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515492957746 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.2975951904 192% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0670625229 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.0 106.682146367 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.4444444444 20.7667163134 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249115931672 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104441308546 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730925345938 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158841379393 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563390816672 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.0946893788 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.3001002004 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.1190380762 174% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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