Write a narrative essay an object (gift/souvenir/possesion...) that is meaningful
Many years ago , I was a little boy and lived with my grand mother . My grand ma purchased for me a teddy bear at my birthday . It is a meaningful present for me , and I have still kept until now .
At my 7th birthday , she took me to park in order to played games and ate out . My grand ma took my hand , and took care of me devotedly during at this day . We were going to park , We saw a small souvenir store . She came to the store and bought a teddy bear for me . It is a big brown soft teddy bear that I have loved so far . I always hug my teddy bear when I go to bed . During to park , I was happy with my present , and my grand enjoyed my happiness . This is a special gift from my grand ma , and I love her so much .
This is a meaningful gift for me . I always hug it when i go to bed because it is a teddy bear that I have the first time , and hugging it like hugging my grand ma . Moreover , my grand ma is retired , and she lived with a little pension . She still buys it for me an expensive teddy bear . She has spent her whole life to sacrifice her children and grandchildren . Finally , the teddy bear is beautiful memory with both of us . The gift I am not able to lose am not able to break because it is the last gift my grand ma give me . In short , this is an important gift for me and is a beautiful memory for me as well .
In conclusion , almost everyone has a special and meaningful items which we keep and protect carefully . The teddy bear is meaningful gift is gorgeous memory for me . This is the love of my grand ma give to me , and I never forget it the love of my grand ma .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, moreover, so, still, well, in conclusion, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 24.0651302605 278% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1285.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 3.85885885886 5.12529762239 75% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18088012738 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.402402402402 0.561755894193 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.60771543086 75% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.3764468362 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.4090909091 106.682146367 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 15.1363636364 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 45.0 5.01903807615 897% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0749390400459 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034783092074 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495698394847 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0580144008037 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323147636643 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.3 13.0946893788 33% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 90.09 50.2224549098 179% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 11.3001002004 39% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 4.52 12.4159519038 36% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.57 8.58950901804 65% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 78.4519038076 32% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 10.7795591182 46% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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