Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Some people argue that if people do not get a job which they most like, they should wait and continue looking. These people cite that the job they like only give them a joy which can not be found in other things. However, I disagree with these people and contend that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job they would be more satisfied. I will support my viewpoint with three reasons.
First of all, taking a secure job right away relieves you from anxiety and depression. When you have family to feed, you need money, and the money is not there if you do not have a job. When you have a job, it provides you money which you can use to run your family and pay your own personal expenses, which in turn relieves you from mental stress. For example, few years back, once I was jobless for three months. Mine all the bank balance were finished, I did not have money to feed my family. As a result, I was severly depressed. I was getting job in which I had no interest, however, later I decided to do job whichever I found. Latter, I took a job in which I had no interest. Notwithstanding, I got paid well and as a result I could feed my family. Consequently, I became stressless and energetic again. If I would have not taken the job right away, it could severly damage my life.
Second of all, if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away because it precludes humiliation in your family. When you do not employed, your friends and family start to tease you that you could not do anything in life. For example, when one of my friend was unemployed, his family and friends were making fun of his education and his ability. They were saying that he can not do anything in life. As a result, he was quite upset. In fact, he was not getting the job he wanted, however, late I suggested him to do whatever job he gets. He was convinced and latter he had started a job. He told me that his friends and family eventually stopped to ridicule him. So taking a job opportunity right away helps us to preculde being a character of fun.
Third of all, if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away becaue it provides them experience. When you stay doing nothing, you learn nothing. However, if you does a job, no matter it is in your interested field or not, you get a significant amount of experience. For example, my aerospace engineer friend was not able to get a job in aerospace engineering. Nevertheless, he latter took a job in automobile. He worked in automobile sector for one year and latter found the job he wanted to have. He told me that the expericence he had accumulate in automobile sector helped him to enhance his aerospace skills.
In conclusion, I think, if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, third, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 102.0 43.0788530466 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3950617284 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51121736499 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.382716049383 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 34.0 9.59856630824 354% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1924468131 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5151515152 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496062739766 0.236089414692 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14538572845 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154131535825 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368485031315 0.150856017488 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144073284977 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.6 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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