With the development of science, technology and business in this day and age, it has become a core factor that makes people focus on it. Therefore, art has faded and is less attractive than before. In this essay, I will clarify reasons for it and give possible ways to boost art’s attraction.
There are multitudes of reasons why people nowadays pay more attention to aspects such as technology and business. Firstly, it is believed that art cannot help to find opportunities for well-paying jobs and stable jobs. For example, with singers and actors, if they are not famous, they cannot have as many shows as well-known people. Therefore, it will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, technology and business are fields that offer good jobs such as engineers, researchers or executives and bring high salaries. Secondly, with the hectic schedule, people just concentrate on how to solve all the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them have to plug in work and gradually forget other things, including art.
I strongly suggest solutions that can change people’s views in art and bring attention to art. First of all, it is essential to have job orientations to let people know more about artistic jobs that have the same value as science, technology and business. In addition, various art subjects should be added to school and the time for studying arts should also increase. Thus, if children can understand art from a young age, they may feel values that art brings to life. Last but not least, the government needs to have policies which help to develop art such as encouraging artists to exhibit their artwork without paying a fee or opening more galleries so that people can visit them without going far.
In conclusion, art’s attention has decreased due to wrong thoughts about it. Therefore, we need to incorporate more art into life to make people change views about it.
With the development of science, technology and business in this day and age, it has become a core factor that makes people focus on it. Therefore, art has faded and is less attractive than before. In this essay, I will clarify reasons for it and give possible ways to boost art’s attraction.
There are multitudes of reasons why people nowadays pay more attention to aspects such as technology and business. Firstly, it is believed that art cannot help to find opportunities for well-paying jobs and stable jobs. For example, with singers and actors, if they are not famous, they cannot have as many shows as well-known people. Therefore, it will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, technology and business are fields that offer good jobs such as engineers, researchers or executives and bring high salaries. Secondly, with the hectic schedule, people just concentrate on how to solve all the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them have to plug in work and gradually forget other things, including art.
I strongly suggest solutions that can change people’s views in art and bring attention to art. First of all, it is essential to have job orientations to let people know more about artistic jobs that have the same value as science, technology and business. In addition, various art subjects should be added to school and the time for studying arts should also increase. Thus, if children can understand art from a young age, they may feel values that art brings to life. Last but not least, the government needs to have policies which help to develop art such as encouraging artists to exhibit their artwork without paying a fee or opening more galleries so that people can visit them without going far.
In conclusion, art’s attention has decreased due to wrong thoughts about it. Therefore, we need to incorporate more art into life to make people change views about it.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, tech...
^^
Line 2, column 673, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them ha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 790, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lly forget other things, including art. I strongly suggest solutions that can ch...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96666666667 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6276693979 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.830747992 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4117647059 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343564092563 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11115778645 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127827333379 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266515179022 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.276341580222 0.056905535591 486% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, tech...
^^
Line 2, column 673, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them ha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 790, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lly forget other things, including art. I strongly suggest solutions that can ch...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96666666667 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6276693979 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.830747992 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4117647059 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343564092563 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11115778645 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127827333379 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266515179022 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.276341580222 0.056905535591 486% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.