It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As a student, studying history about my country is an indispensable part of the school’s curriculum, and I believe that studying about my local history can bring several benefits. First and foremost, local history would help young learners know what had happened in the past and the sacrifice of their citizens. As a result, students could treasure their life and everything they are having now. Moreover, the merit of studying the history of their locality could make them realize their responsibility for saving and promoting the country. Take an example about myself when I study about the history of my country, I could see that learning about it helps me a lot in greatly appreciate with everything around me as well as take pride in my origin. Furthermore, local history also helps me be aware of my bounden duty in preserving and protecting my country.
looking from another angle, learning world history shares equal importance just as a local one. Firstly, learning world history would give students knowledge in how people build and develop their countries, and students could learn from those countries to help their own nation. American history, for example, as we might know that America is the most thriving country in the world, and in order to have this remarkable success Americans were very intelligent when they took advantage of the II world war to sell weapons to other countries. Hence, after the II world war ended, the economy of that country was getting bigger and stronger; finally, it become the most developed country in the world. As we can see when learning American history would help students to learn how that country was developed by selling weapons, and students would take it as a great experience to apply to their country if they were in war again.
In conclusion, I believe that students instead of focusing on local history rather than world history should study both equally because each kind of history has its own advantage in equipping students with a more well-rounded perspective of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Looking
...reserving and protecting my country. looking from another angle, learning world hist...
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Line 3, column 652, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...etting bigger and stronger; finally, it become the most developed country in the world...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01470588235 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59916642214 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520588235294 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3906882581 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.083333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293435312681 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120866191041 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678461785604 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207795641791 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245291123405 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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