Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, studying at a university plays a significant role in people's daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think that students should take at least one year break for traveling or working before starting a study at their universities, while others do not. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that students do not need to take a break for working or traveling before entering their universities. There are several reasons as follows.
First of all, students are able to work or travel while they are attending their universities. Universities provide their students with summer and winter vacations. When they use such vacations, they can work or travel during without spending another year, which is very important in their life. For example, one of my cousins who wanted one year break before entering his university did not take the break because he realized that he could travel during his vacations while attending his university. In fact, he went to Europe and Australia during his summer and winter vacations, respectively. What he told me was that the vacations were long enough to experience new things and various cultures at different countries without losing his time. If he had taken a year off before entering his university, he would have wasted his time.
In addition, it is better for students to take a break after their graduation from their universities. Job positions that is available for people who graduated from high school and university are different in quality and salary. When a student obtains a job after their university graduation, they are likely to have a better promising job. Take my friends, Minsoo and Wonseub, for example. Minsoo who was tired of his studying in high school made a decision to work before entering a university to earn money for his tuition. However, the job that he obtained offered him a minimum wage because he did not have good skills that employers want. This is in stark contrast with Wonseub's case. Wonseub who also suffered from poverty decided to enter his university with a student loan. Fortunately, he was able to obtain almost straight A's in his university and excel all throughout his school. Wonseub who majored in computer science received job offers from various decent companies ranging from Google Korea to Samsung Electronics, that are likely to give him a large amount of salary. He did not make a decision yet, but what he would choose, it is obvious that he could make a lot of money in the future, which he could not achieve if he obtained his job before entering the university.
All things considered, I firmly believe that the advantages of attending a university without a time break far outweigh those of taking a break before going to a university for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, at least, for example, in addition, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90204081633 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63885995098 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469387755102 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3515591333 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.083333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233865949592 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780460247297 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636390195459 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16033712139 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799816011888 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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