Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There are widely differing views as to whether the deciding factor in securing a successful life is one's personal traits or material possessions and natural beauty. The first consideration about the argument may be conducive to favour money and appearance over diligence and persistence, yet further exploration the nature of success suggests vice versa.
Admittedly, it is natural why some people stress the importance of one's financial background and distinctive appearance. This is because many of those famous in the media tend to brag about their luxurious lifestyle along with on-screen appearance. The prejudice, therefore, seems to be particulary relevant to media celebreties ranging from actors to well-known singers. Meanwhile, we are often exposed to sad stories of those truly talented failing in castings to ,say, Hollywood films due to defects in their appearance. Having said that, if one's success is eternal is still a matter of debate unless they possess adequate skills.
From a wider perspective, it becomes apparent that a person needs to persevere through difficulties if they want to achieve a long-lasting success in life. But for robust personality shaped through hardships, a person in the limelight would be more likely to back down when encountering challenges. Furthermore, success in life is not only defined by how famous one is. That is to say, there are still other fields apart from being celebrity such as engineering and banking which can promise financial prospects coupled with successful life even if they come with little public attention. The knowledge a person needs to gain in order to secure these professions is decidely more of a matter of passion, hard work and determination rather than one's financial background and natural beauty.
To conclude, some people attribute successful life to one's money and appearance while others give preference to personal qualities. However convincing the former view may appear, I take the side of the latter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, apart from, as to, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37898089172 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91631596005 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630573248408 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1220805676 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.642857143 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22918496635 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743568324536 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649750005541 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14491028502 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727514504663 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.