Technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Technologies have become a ubiquitous means of entertainment for everyone, especially children as they influence how youngsters spend their free time. In my opinion, technologies have both pros and cons, but their advantages are more influential.
On the one hand, technologies such as television and smartphones have outstanding benefits for youngsters. Firstly, technologies provide diverse ways to utilize free time for children since they can entertain themselves by watching Youtube on TV or listening to audiobooks on smartphones. According to research in the US, 30% of children prefer watching Youtube on television as their favourite hobby because it is undemanding and helps them explore new facts. Moreover, technologies create a new approach to education for children such as educational games to help them absorb knowledge without boredom. Take an application named "Duolingo" as an example, the uniqueness of the app is how it smartly helps users learn a new language directly through games on smartphones without the help of teachers. Thus, Duolingo has attracted a thousand users and successfully helped them master a new language.
On the other hand, despite their valuable advantages, technologies can inevitably wreak havoc on children when overused. Children could suffer from Internet addiction when they spend too much time on their smartphones scrolling through social media. For example, Worldwide social media statistics have concluded that over 70% of American children and teenagers have social media addiction. Moreover, when using television or smartphones over time, children could suffer from mental illnesses as they cannot deal with spiteful words from other people online. 30% of UK children go to a therapist for depression treatment because they see too many bullying words towards them while using phones for social media.
In conclusion, although technologies are evolutionary in the diversity of entertainment and educational approaches, they could precipitate Internet addiction and worsen children's mental health. However, the disadvantages might seem severe but are solved when children have restricted time for technology. However, after considering the factors, I support that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79701492537 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17154029688 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561194029851 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5497263918 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281671612947 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100407351601 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707163026308 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198162885133 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774758455787 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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