Cinema attendance by age group

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Cinema attendance by age group

The given line graph indicates the percentages of people in four groups of age who attended the cinema in Great Britain between 1984 and 2000.
Overall, the quantity of people who went to the cinema grew in all four groups. The 15 to 24 year old group went to the cinema having the most ? after 16 years.
At the age of 15 to 24 years old, we can see the rapid development of cinema attendances between 1984 and about 1991, from 15% to 33%. In contrast, the 35 and over remained unchanged at the same time, just about 2%. From 1991 to 2000, the percentages of cinema attendances fluctuated dramatically in the group 15 to 24, however, it still rose and reached a peak at about 59%. Meanwhile, there was only a slight increase in the group 35 and over, from 2% to 13%.
Remaining to those aged 7-14 and 25-35, in spite of starting at two different percentage numbers, they both end at over 30 percent. The number of people who watched movies in the cinema at the age of 7 - 14 rose negligibly between 1984 and 1989, then rose sharply in 1994 and ended the period at roughly 33% in 2000. By the time, the 25 - 35 viewers percentages in 1984, 1989 and 1994 started at about 5%, 10% and 25% respectively after rising slightly in 2000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...up went to the cinema having the most ? after 16 years. At the age of 15 to 24 years...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “after” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...up went to the cinema having the most ? after 16 years. At the age of 15 to 24 years...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... at about 59%. Meanwhile, there was only a slight increase in the group 35 and ov...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, then, while, in contrast, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1002.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 229.0 196.424390244 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37554585153 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41410096559 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554585152838 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3345749265 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0909090909 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8181818182 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307039145177 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123545681582 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111853474489 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223384068811 0.15604864568 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104036092983 0.0819641961636 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 11.4140731707 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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