Which modern invention is essential for you and your family and which one could you and your family live without? Explain your answer.
The invention of smartphones has greatly impacted everyone globally. Many of us own a smartphone and it is a common sight to see Singaporeans using them while walking, travelling and even when working. It is lightweight and portable, often used by both working adults or students to meet their various needs. In my family, the smartphone is the most important modern-day invention that caters to our needs as we are able to do a myriad of things without disrupting other family members since each one us has our phones.
Smartphones give my family and I access to the Internet and entertainment at the tip of our fingers. Often, we are as busy as bees, working or studying around the clock. We rarely have a chance to sleep a wink and our workload continues to increase. Our hectic lifestyles rarely allow us personal time. Amidst our busy schedules, smartphones offer my family to have information on the go or watch movies while commuting. It takes time to travel and while travelling we can immerse ourselves in a PDF storybook or a heart-warming Korean drama. This enables us to kill two birds with one stone while travelling and to unwind after a hectic day at work or school. My family thus greatly appreciates the wonders of the invention of smartphones as it has greatly helped us to make valuable use of our time.
One advantage of the smartphone is being able to communicate with one another immediately which is why my family greatly relies on the smartphone. When my family and I are busy at school or at work, we need not worry about one another. Smartphones allow us to contact each other almost instantly with a simple call or text. This helps us to be less worried. Smartphones has the function of tracking another family member’s location in case of an emergency. I can send pictures so that my parents can have a piece of mind that I am safe and sound. Smartphones are a bridge between my family members and me in this day and age.
Television, on the other hand, is something my family can definitely do without. In comparison to smartphones, the television is at least twenty times the size of a smartphone. It is too bulky and inconvenient to bring around unlike a smartphone. The television also has to be connected to a power socket which is not portable and its location is fixed. With a smartphone that has almost as many functions or more as compared to television, my family can definitely do without a television. The amount of time spent on the phone is also more than what is spent on television. Thus, the television is definitely unimportant in my household.
The television also prevents my family from bonding. When we are watching the television, we rarely talk to each other as we want to pay close attention to the storyline of addictive dramas. My family has a meal rule that no mobile phones are to be used during meals giving us the opportunity to chit-chat and improve family relations. Thus, the smartphone is not a hindrance as unlike the television we can bond over meals.
It can be said that although modern inventions like television are made with detailed thinking, they may not be as useful as they claim to be. Televisions impedes family bonding time as all eyes are glued to the screen. Smartphones, on the other hand, provides entertainment and has numerous functions in a portable device. My family definitely prefers smartphones to television as they are feasible and convenient. Thus, depending on each families’ needs different types of modern inventions cater to different types of families.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...at has almost as many functions or more as compared to television, my family can d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, while, as to, at least, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 24.0651302605 270% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 41.998997996 198% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2945.0 1615.20841683 182% => OK
No of words: 615.0 315.596192385 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78861788618 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97987886753 4.20363070211 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88512107033 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452032520325 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 956.7 506.74238477 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 5.43587174349 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 16.0721442886 218% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1727424497 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1428571429 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88571428571 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133613748536 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381333311522 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405544989615 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828787244701 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201001334608 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...at has almost as many functions or more as compared to television, my family can d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, while, as to, at least, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 24.0651302605 270% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 41.998997996 198% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2945.0 1615.20841683 182% => OK
No of words: 615.0 315.596192385 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78861788618 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97987886753 4.20363070211 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88512107033 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452032520325 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 956.7 506.74238477 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 5.43587174349 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 16.0721442886 218% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1727424497 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1428571429 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88571428571 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133613748536 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381333311522 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405544989615 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828787244701 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201001334608 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 78.4519038076 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.