Some people think the purpose of education is to prepare the future workforce and make good members of society. Others think the purpose of education should lead to self-fulfillment. What is your opinion?

Submitted by kai on Wed, 10/10/2018 - 10:51

The purpose of education, which is always debatable, has now become unprecedentedly controversial. It is argued that education should emphasize on self-fulfillment. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the argument that we should focus on the preparation of the future workforce or to make good members of society by learning in universities. This article will elaborate both sides and thus lead to a constructive conclusion.
At the outset, there are numerous reasons why some people insist that self-fulfillment is the target of education. And the most conspicuous one stems from the fact that education is comprehensive enough to teach students plenty of knowledge not only about practicing skills but also some soft skills. As an illustration, students will learn how to appreciate music and dance even if they will not enter the relative field in the future. Therefore, they think education can help to make themselves better in many aspects.
Nevertheless, there remains a deluge of arguments in favor of my stance. And the most preponderant ones lies in the fact that most of people rely on education to find careers. Because most of people are not rich enough to survive without sufficient working skills, and the education can not only enhance individual's ability, but also help to construct the prosperity of a country. For example, China allocate more than 5 times of tax in education than a decade ago. Therefore, education plays a crucial role in both individuals and societies which overwhelm the self-fulfillment.
Considering all the substantial insights outlined above, we can safely reach a conclusion that self-fulfillment only skims the surface of education's aim, and the preparation in being a qualified member of society cannot be ignored.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
PTE_Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation of the future workforce or to make good members of society by learning in u...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...preponderant ones lies in the fact that most of people rely on education to find careers. Beca...
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Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...y on education to find careers. Because most of people are not rich enough to survive without ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 20.9802955665 76% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 31.9359605911 125% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 5.75862068966 313% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1207.87684729 123% => OK
No of words: 283.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25088339223 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25205847559 2.71678728327 120% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611307420495 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 379.143842365 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.931034482759 537% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7050110073 50.4703680194 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.142857143 104.977214359 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.9669160288 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.25397266985 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305920274606 0.242375264174 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911622450342 0.0925447433944 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675602002825 0.071462118173 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164227473676 0.151781067708 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067025497005 0.0609392437508 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 12.6369458128 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.1260098522 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 11.5310837438 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32886699507 110% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 55.0591133005 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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