Over the past few years, young people have followed celebrities as their role models. Some people often believe that the young generation should follow the footstep of those successful personals, others maintain that this idea is not advisable. This essay will discuss the reason why youngsters should not be encouraged to imitate glamorous movie stars as their role models.
Celebrities who adapt the luxurious lifestyles should not be the role model of young people because it will influence young generations' mindset negatively. This lifestyle encourage youngster to spend money they cannot afford. For instance, nowadays, concerning numbers of teenagers are interested on buying expensive clothes and going to five-star restaurants. Hence, youngsters, who are prone to peer influences should not be encouraged to follow this step.
Furthermore, the genuineness of contents show in media are questionable. Superstars always show the better part of their lives and kept who they really are from the public. For example, in order to boost the viewership and gain more fame, celebrities are involved in unhealthy rivalry and willing to use themselves as objects of interests. Therefore, young people who are still immature unable to judge the authenticity and are vulnerable in this case.
This essay discussed how sports and movie stars expose more of their luxurious lifestyles than their true selves, which can influence youngster in a negatively. I am consummately accorded why glamorous celebrities should not be the role models for the younger generation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, really, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 31.9359605911 78% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1207.87684729 110% => OK
No of words: 241.0 242.827586207 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51867219917 5.00649968141 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85762908249 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593360995851 0.580463131201 102% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 379.143842365 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7119398067 50.4703680194 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.307692308 104.977214359 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5384615385 20.9669160288 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.25397266985 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159185767286 0.242375264174 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543599741144 0.0925447433944 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538386479909 0.071462118173 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104660044616 0.151781067708 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580307032229 0.0609392437508 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 12.6369458128 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 11.5310837438 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32886699507 108% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 55.0591133005 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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