Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

In modern times, numerous young cohorts look up to famous sport personnel and movie stars for inspiration. Many individuals find imitating the celebrities thoroughly constructive while others hold an opponent’s view. In my opinion, adolescents can certainly benefit from following the role models with few exceptions which I will further discuss in this essay.

To begin with, eminent personalities in sports or entertainment fields are a product of life long tenacity, struggle and industriousness. For example, famous Indian Actor, Amitabh Bachchan has spent many years learning and sharpening his acting skills and overall personality. As a result, he is a living legend and at the elderly age of 78 also, he is a source of inspiration for many. In short, youngsters can inculcate the virtue of hard-work and consistency at very early age by learning from their respective heroes .

On the contrary, few of the well-known people in movie industry and sports arena portray their larger than life image on social media and it has adverse effects on young brains. To quote an instance, influenced by the lavish lifestyle of vivacious film artists like Salman Khan, his fans are often found drinking and partying by spending on their parents’ hard-earned money.To be more specific, such behavior should be discouraged and celebrities should sensibly post on social media about their life.

In conclusion, foregoing discussion propounds the view that merits of following the role models far outweigh the drawbacks and youngsters must be vigilant and careful in choosing the role models and mimicking their behaviors.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in short, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 8.36945812808 167% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 5.94088669951 34% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 20.9802955665 67% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1381.0 1207.87684729 114% => OK
No of words: 254.0 242.827586207 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43700787402 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 3.92707691288 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99725877581 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681102362205 0.580463131201 117% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 379.143842365 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.65517241379 219% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6551724138 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0258410172 50.4703680194 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.1 104.977214359 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.9669160288 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9 7.25397266985 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133438370669 0.242375264174 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476426856445 0.0925447433944 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475415738698 0.071462118173 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791823913891 0.151781067708 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420432405448 0.0609392437508 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 12.6369458128 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.32886699507 126% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 55.0591133005 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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