Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The author claims that the benchmark of the greatness in a society is not the success of the ruler, artists, or the scientists. The writer further reasons that the sole indicator of greatness id the comfort of the national. I generally disagree with this claim and its adhesive clue. While I concur the welfare of the people is the criterion of a great society, it is not the sole one.
First of all, it is obvious fact that the comfort and satisfaction of the nation is an illustration of the well society which is governing by an effective leader. Actually, the basic and initial responsibility of each elected government is supporting the people who vote him and convince opponents who do not elect him. This effort for support leads to the preparation of welfare for the citizens. As the people satisfied by the presenting serves will also show the same support toward the governor. I prefer to give an example from my own country to explain my logic explicitly. Before the election of the current president, our country was not in the great state, and it had issues in the areas such as unemployment, insufficient health-care, and low-level of education. On the other hand, by the election of the current president, there was significant variation in the people life-standard which pursue people to elect him for the second period of presidency. This satisfaction and its caused verification by people are reflected in the result of the second election; in which 22.5% more people voted him in the comparison of his previous election.
Another striking factor which should be considered is the endless desire of the man-kind for thriving and flourishing. Actually, the human-being possesses the nature of perfection-seeking; and in each state of his life, he dreams to go beyond it and achieves more success. This desire is actuated in the case that he is fulfilled with his initial and basic demands. Otherwise, the huger or homeless person does not fantasy for the triumphing in science, art, or law. According to the statistical table presented in the Top Tens Website, the United States is ranked as the first successful country. Via the welfare and comfort that is presented in this country, its national freely look for the further steps of success. As there is no pressure and stress of hunger, shelter, and safety; the people nourished and thrived in the various fields. For example, Bill Gates in the field of technology, Mouhammad Ali in the area of sport, or Elvis Presley as the well-known singer become successful as they live in the great nation.
Finally, the logic of the consideration of the welfare of the people and ignorance of achievements of the people in the reason section is a shaky one. In this logic, the author overlooks the fact the successful artist, governor, science persons are a part of the same nation which he only emphasizes the welfare of its citizens. However, he underestimates the fact all these achievements and success is for the sake of the comfort presented in the society. They are successful persons who matured in this welfare nation and go further the public life standard and achieves those successes.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned arguments illustrates my stands toward this disposition and its clue. As discussed, the comfort of the people is crucial; however, in the further steps, the welfare leads to the achievement and success of the people in various fields which the ignorance of this fact is not the wise action.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...reparation of welfare for the citizens. As the people satisfied by the presenting ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, well, while, for example, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2904.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93039049236 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86379663014 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449915110357 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 899.1 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5068662453 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.692307692 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6538461538 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210973761259 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597781483815 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497612639178 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138709318868 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594676990804 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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