New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time .Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages ?
Hi-tech gadgets have altered the way how young people use their space time.I personally believe that this trend is totally both positive and negative effect on our lives.
There are two major disadvantages of technological developments on children life.The primary problem is that modern devices devote a large amount of time to browse, play video games, and it has an adverse impact on the way children spend their free time.Rather hang out with their peers, join outdoor activities, they just likely keep their eyes on the screen . This action causes to more and more children suffer problem with eyes such as eye strain, short-sightedness. My younger sister, for example, is just 6 years old but she now has eyes sickness and one of the principal reasons for this is she spend too much time playing video games and watching films. Another serious problem relating with modern devices that is children can not even concentrate on studying .They just focus on playing technological equipment and even can not put it down. And this has a negative effect on their life later.
On the other hand, using technological devices can also bring some positively affect our lives, specially for children whose age group grow so quickly. Children can learn a wide range of valuable skills. By using hi-tech gadgets, they can enrich their knowledge about animals and their natural habitats in some educational programmes like National Geography. For instant,I always encourage my brother watch this channel to expand his knowledge on life's animals.
In conclusion , novel technological developments have both positively and negatively affect on the way children spend their free time. However, I still believe that new technologies bring lot of beneficial effect on children's life.
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also, but, however, if, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21754385965 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7208238003 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624561403509 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.8789508607 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.916666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329569679826 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120909221061 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977405651219 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213619223371 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099671983775 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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