The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The film industry is one developing significantly in the world. However, several people argue that there are a number of brutal scenes in films and violent films should be banned because it is the primary sector that causes increasing crimes in society. In my opinion, I partly agree with this view.
On the one hand, disseminating the large unrestricted violent contents on the screen has an adverse impact on the people and society. For the younger generation, it would destruct their mental developments. Unlike adults, minors are often curious and keen to imitate the violent behaviors which have been sighted from TV programs, possibly they are mentally immature and incapable of distinguishing the right and wrong. For adults who lake of self-control abilities, an extreme broadcast of the violent action movies could act as their references to engage with potential criminal activities. The reason for this is that they can acquire the essential skills and experience for committing crimes. For example, a serial killer murdered more than 30 people during the period between 1993 and 2000 and claimed that a violent movie inspired him.
On the other hand, banning violent films is not the best solution to reduce crime in the community. It is essential for schools to teach students about the law and the danger of crimes for them to avoid being lured into crimes. Besides, the authority could impose strict punishment for criminals to warn others. Moreover, several individuals consider violent movies as a means of entertainment. This is because a series of aggressive TV episodes are exciting and stimulating which would be beneficial for the daily commuters to refresh their mind and release the work-related stress. It is unfair when governments restrict that film.
In conclusion, movies contain a variety of brutal scenes that have a severe impact on people causing an increasing number of crimes in the community. Nonetheless, governments should have some other methods to educate citizens about the danger the crimes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a lake
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23547400612 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76524983082 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571865443425 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8032808358 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.705882353 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154064919669 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521306657101 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494257433909 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103843834297 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479998982269 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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