The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The controversy arises when governments manage violent information in mass media such as news, televisions and online videos. In my opinion, although limiting the amount of violent film and TV programs is a good way to downgrade violent crimes, the key to resolve the issue is to use legislation and education methods.
On the one hand, reducing violence on TV would certainly be a good start to decreasing violence among people. Media really has a lot of power to influence people and the most alarming effect is on the children and youth. Teenagers are so vulnerable and immature that they cannot judge whether the activities performed in mass media are right or not. So, viewing some violent behavior in a movie or on television makes them try to reproduce that situation in real life and commit violence. Furthermore, an excessive content of violence arouses people's aggressiveness. Consequently, they believe things can be solved by violence and utilize it as an approach to deal with conflicts in the real world.
However, watching violent movies does not directly make one violent. A huge amount of crimes happened definitely because criminals have never received enough education. The degree to which people are influenced by what they see in the media depends directly on how they are educated about social responsibility and personal accountability. Furthermore, a relax legal system also encourages offenders to commit a crime. Therefore, it is better to adopt a strict law system to solve and control crime problems.
In conclusion, while the amount of violence in the media should be restricted by the government because it is linked to crimes and social issues, I believe this is not a root solution for violent crimes. Instead, the government should more focus on the education of young adults and the national legal system.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d personal accountability. Furthermore, a relax legal system also encourages offenders ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14950166113 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87607111867 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3613459571 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23626740821 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681625345379 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461371672715 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140559098072 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363752691624 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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