Your child is going on a school trip, overseas for 3 days. The headmaster is looking for parents to join the trip. Write a letter to state that you would like to join it. Mention:
Why you would like to join the trip
How you can be helpful to others
Ask some general questions on the trip
Dear Sir\ Madam,
I am writing this letter to you in regards to the next month's school trip to Cairo. I would like to register for this trip.
I have been working as a tourist guide since 2016, so I have been to many cities, and I had visited Cairo twice last year. In turn, I have enough experience to guide the pupils. Moreover, I am pretty trained to give them a historical tour of the monuments.
In addition to this, I am a certified basic life support rescuer, which is vital for any emergency during the journey. So I hope my request will be accepted and I would appreciate if you provide me with a few details about the excursion. I want to know if there are any additional charges for parents. Also, the accommodation and meals if it will be provided to parents or not.
Looking forward to hearing from you at the earliest.
Yours faithfully,
Yousef
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| 2019-04-25 | drabouyousif | 56 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...dam, I am writing this letter to you in regards to the next months school trip to Cairo. I...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...would like to register for this trip. I have been working as a tourist guide si...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 711.0 1615.20841683 44% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 159.0 315.596192385 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47169811321 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 4.20363070211 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54408540638 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 176.041082164 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679245283019 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 506.74238477 44% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4261398482 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6363636364 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219779183062 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793907054336 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848277765143 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138308846965 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113509043675 0.056905535591 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 13.0946893788 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.05 12.4159519038 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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