Topic: Nowadays, celebrities increasingly have the status of role models, in particular for younger people. Do you see this as a positive or negative development?
These days, the development of social mass media has lead to a relationship between celebrities and their fans. Many teenagers have regarded those famous people as their idols. In my view, this phenomenon brings about a variety of good points but there are also some drawbacks.
On the one hand, lots of people have reputation for their extraordinary talents which can not only inspire adolescents but also help them to realize and promote their aptitude. For example, many famous soccer players like Ronaldo and Messi with their remarkable performances, have encouraged a lot of teenagers to take part in this sport. Thanks to this, some of the youngsters can discover their potential and spend time on developing their skills in the future. Secondly, celebrities can also be good examples of virtues. According to a study, a great number of superstars have taken part in doing voluntary activities every year, Angelina Josie – a famous actress of Hollywood, has donated over 20 million USD for the poor living in Africa recently, she also built many houses and upgraded several hospitals for individuals who were homeless. Evidently, these instances proved that teenagers can learn many good points from their idols.
On the other hand, there are still some bad points. Firstly, lots of people are well-known for their scandals or public misconduct. Take an example in a man in Viet Nam who is renowned as the name “Kha Banh”, he has been made several videos about violent actions and committed crimes as well. Moreover, his bad speech with wrongdoings have stimulated a great number of students to follow, which detrimentally affect youngsters’ behaviour and increase the criminal rate in Viet Nam significantly. Secondly, there are many fans spending a large amount of time and money on changing their appearance so as to be looked like their idols, they try to imitate every action and style of super-stars. Additionally, many teenagers, nowadays, kick wars with each other to protect their idols from bad rumours. Obviously, these phenomenons indicate that highly regarding a super-star as model may negatively impact on younger people’s development.
In conclusion, although many celebrities have done very well as a role model for the youth, the potential drawbacks of this trend should be considered.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ake part in this sport. Thanks to this, some of the youngsters can discover their potential...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... and money on changing their appearance so as to be looked like their idols, they try to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27005347594 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87143492897 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598930481283 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8170369505 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.941176471 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52941176471 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144420052831 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466622714658 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374208372119 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102107371021 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346869432118 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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